你能写出更好的文章吗?(英文)

das

This thread is good enough.

benedict_me您的文章不错吗...但人谦虚一些能学到更多东西...你的文章让我学到不少词汇,谢谢您.

火柴_天堂,我好担心因为我太久没有回帖了,您也不回帖了...但现在看到您的回帖我就放心了...,我每次都好期待您的回帖,因为能学到好多...

版主谢谢您,希望有更多人能放上他们的文章,文笔好就因该show一show
吗,这样我这种差的人才有更多的空间进步吗?

还没有看到rebin的回复,还有darksider也没指点一下我的文章有些什么问题..

谢谢大家的回复,我把大伙的文章都抄下来了

Jasminefow

rebin近期似乎不方便上网
好在还有其他像rebin一样热心的网友一起交流


交流愉快

benedict_me

原帖由 stanley225 于 10-1-2007 05:04 PM 发表
benedict_me您的文章不错吗...但人谦虚一些能学到更多东西...你的文章让我学到不少词汇,谢谢您.

不用謝，當作交流好了 我也很期待darksider的回復

原帖由 Jasminefow 于 10-1-2007 07:06 PM 发表
rebin近期似乎不方便上网
好在还有其他像rebin一样热心的网友一起交流

快點要他回來

darksider

对不起，最近我没空，开学了，功课多，有空时我会来帮忙写。

南马又再大水灾,而且一次比一次更严重...:@
真是劳民伤财啊.....
别说这些了,这是我的第五篇文章,请大家多多指教...谢谢

How long a human can live in the earth? 10,20,50 or more than that? Most of people will feel their life is too long and jsut let the time passby, but some of them will feel the life is too short,they still got a lot of thing need to do. Which kind of person you are?

I had read a book it said a hypnotist had hypnosis a guy and try to recall his pass life's memories,the guy said something they did not understand, they sent it to a famous archaeologist did the verification, and found that its a old Egypt's language, it is 3000B.C years ago.Where the guy go during this 5000 years?

At northeastern part of the United States, there is a kind of Cicada, we call it 17 years periodical Cicada,its stay in the earth as a egg for 17 years and lay during spring, then they growth,copulation,and spawn thier eggs in to the earth again, but for male cicada its life spam only one month, female only just around 2 months.

If we also have this kind of life cycle calculation, for huamn average age are 50, then we need to wait ...WAW..222042 days around 608 years to reborn. Do you still think our life is too long? We must like the cicada, although our life is limited, we must work hard to acheive our dream, brave to love, do not waste our chriesh life spam.

升精华了,谢谢版主
但我这篇文章没人回应了,是不是写的太烂了,没人看的懂...

为何无人问津了?大家都很忙吗?

为何生为精华后，反而没人回帖了。。。

Jasminefow

我相信最近网友们都比较忙碌．
我最近也因有事小忙．

会尽量抽空帮你看看．
不要哭不要哭

fuxkn

“ 为何无人问津了 ” 别着急。。我来也 ！！试试看。。
看来你在做翻译啊? 读你这篇文章，我觉得好像在读华文咧。又好像在那里看过喔。。黑色是我的。

“How long a human can live in the earth? 10,20,50 or more than that?”

How long can a human being live ? 10,20,50 or even more ?

“Most people feel that their life is too long and jsut let the time passby, but some of them will feel the life is too short,they still got a lot of thing need to do. Which kind of person you are?”

While many are idling away their times thinking that life is long, many do feel that time is precious. Which category do you belong to ?

I had read a book it said a hypnotist had hypnosis a guy and try to recall his pass life's memories,the guy said something they did not understand, they sent it to a famous archaeologist did the verification, and found that its a old Egypt's language, it is 3000B.C years ago.Where the guy go during this 5000 years?

(     ) IN an experiment revealed in a book I read, a person who was hypnotized to relate his previous life had uttered something that is beyond our comprehension. When sent to an archaeologist, it was found to be an old Egptian language, some 3000 years before Christ.

刚编辑的一段


At northeastern part of the United States, there is a kind of Cicada, we call it 17 years periodical Cicada,its stay in the earth as a egg for 17 years and lay during spring, then they growth,copulation,and spawn thier eggs in to the earth again, but for male cicada its life spam only one month, female only just around 2 months.

There is such a insect known as cicada ( 蝉 )found in the north eastern part of the US. It hatches every spring from eggs that were buried for 17 years underground. The cicada will grow, reproduce, and lay eggs in the earth again. The life span of a male cicada is only one month while that of a female is only two.

If we also have this kind of life cycle calculation, for huamn average age are 50, then we need to wait ...WAW..222042 days around 608 years to reborn. Do you still think our life is too long? We must like the cicada, although our life is limited, we must work hard to acheive our dream, brave to love, do not waste our chriesh life spam.

这最后一段，我不是很明白。怎样算？

[ 本帖最后由 fuxkn 于 12-2-2007 11:32 PM 编辑 ]

谢谢您的回复,写的好好.
说的没错,我是读华校的,所以长长以华文的方式写英文....
这文章取自一本书,可能您读过这本书吧.我时常在读了一些文章之后,就试着将它翻译成英文,但英文不好,怎样翻都翻不好,所以希望大家能帮我..

朕乃皇上

我看到很辛苦
不是很明白lz最后１个文章要表达什么
我有时间再来看看

Summer_kaze

How long a human can live in the earth? 10,20,50 or more than that? Most of people will feel their life is too long and jsut let the time passby, but some of them will feel the life is too short,they still got a lot of thing need to do. Which kind of person you are?

I had read a book it said a hypnotist had hypnosis a guy and try to recall his pass life's memories,the guy said something they did not understand, they sent it to a famous archaeologist did the verification, and found that its a old Egypt's language, it is 3000B.C years ago.Where the guy go during this 5000 years?

At northeastern part of the United States, there is a kind of Cicada, we call it 17 years periodical Cicada,its stay in the earth as a egg for 17 years and lay during spring, then they growth,copulation,and spawn thier eggs in to the earth again, but for male cicada its life spam only one month, female only just around 2 months.

If we also have this kind of life cycle calculation, for huamn average age are 50, then we need to wait ...WAW..222042 days around 608 years to reborn. Do you still think our life is too long? We must like the cicada, although our life is limited, we must work hard to acheive our dream, brave to love, do not waste our chriesh life spam.

再稍微改了一些句子
第二段好像沒有關聯
最後那段也好像怪怪
  
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How long human beings are still able to survive on earth? Perhaps 10,20 or 50 or even more years to go?  Some people might feel their whole life is just way too long to go and just simply letting time to pass them by.Indeed there are some who feel that life is so short and yet many things could have been already done or completed by themselves.Which side do u belong to?

Recently I read a book on hypnotism.It is about a hypnotist who tried to hypnotise his patient to recall his memory on previous life.The guy spoke something that he could not understand.The process was recorded and sent to a famous archaeologist for performing an in-depth interpretation.They later discovered that it is supposed to be an ancient Egyptian language which was being used during 3000B.C.So where has the guy been during that time?

In the northern-east part of the United States, there is one kind of Cicada,also known as the 17-years-periodical Cicada,where it lives on earth as an egg for 16 years and it hatches during the spring.They eventually start to grow,reproduce and spawn their eggs on earth.The average life span of a male cicada is merely a month where as the female is about two months.

If we as human beings have had such a life cycle,for instance an average age of 50 for each person,perhaps we might need to wait 222042 days,which is around 608 years to reborn? Therefore, do you think our whole life is way too long to go? I think we should think like the cicada.Our life is so short though we worked hard to achieve our dreams,become strong in love and did not waste any single cherished moment in our whole life.


[ 本帖最后由 Summer_kaze 于 13-2-2007 04:51 PM 编辑 ]

rebin

话说我在这里帮中国人补习+改作文，变突然间很想念这个帖子，去翻回来看看。

原来多了这么多回复，我都不好意思说我差点忘了有这个帖子了。

时过境迁，我已经在地球的另一半，楼主也已经化身为乞丐了。

手痒的我帮你牛刀小试一番吧 （如果还有人回来看这个贴的话）。

还有，你们的英文都好好哦。

原帖由 stanley225 于 17-1-2007 03:14 PM 发表
南马又再大水灾,而且一次比一次更严重...:@
真是劳民伤财啊.....
别说这些了,这是我的第五篇文章,请大家多多指教...谢谢

How long a human can live in the earth? 10,20,50 or more than that? Most of people will feel their life is too long and jsut let the time passby, but some of them will feel the life is too short,they still got a lot of thing need to do. Which kind of person you are?


I had read a book it said a hypnotist had hypnosis a guy and try to recall his pass life's memories,the guy said something they did not understand, they sent it to a famous archaeologist did the verification, and found that its a old Egypt's language, it is 3000B.C years ago.Where the guy go during this 5000 years?

At northeastern part of the United States, there is a kind of Cicada, we call it 17 years periodical Cicada,its stay in the earth as a egg for 17 years and lay during spring, then they growth,copulation,and spawn thier eggs in to the earth again, but for male cicada its life spam only one month, female only just around 2 months.



If we also have this kind of life cycle calculation, for huamn average age are 50, then we need to wait ...WAW..222042 days around 608 years to reborn. Do you still think our life is too long? We must like the cicada, although our life is limited, we must work hard to acheive our dream, brave to love, do not waste our chriesh life spam.

Just how long a human can live on the earth? Will it be 10 years, 20 years or even just 50 years? There are people who just waste their time blindly, thinking that there still have some more ahead to waste. Some others meanwhile have handful of things to do, can't hope for more time to have. Which side do you belong to?

A book I read talks about how hypnosis can recall back someone's memories of previous life. The guy being hypnotized uttered some words unrecognizable. Indeed, a famous archaeologist has proven that those words are an old Egyptian language, dating back to some 3000B.C. years ago. So, where has he been during these five thousand years?


There is one kind of Cicada in Northeastern part of the United States, called 17 years periodical Cicada, where it spends 17 years as an egg and hatches during the spring eventually. Then, from there they go through the life cycle with process of growth, reproduction and spawn. The life span for a male Cicada averagely lasts for only one  month and two months for the females.

As if we have the same life cycle, with human average age of 50, we probably need around 608 years or equivalently 222042 days to reborn. From that calculation, nobody will deem lifetime is long enough to have. To appreciate your life, then you need to work harder in achieving your dreams, be brave to show your love, and not to waste any single time of your life.