请英文高手来帮忙改正英文文法！

军事天地

08-10-2008
我的hotlink sim card号码忘记top up，变成inactive了，

25-11-2008
我到过KLCC MAXIS CENTRE找过一个华人consultant帮助，他的名字是 MR.LEE KIEN WOON,
他帮我写E－MAIL去＂recycle sim card deparment＂询问申请恢复sim card号码，但他们给他的的回应是已经做成SIM CARD "  PREPAID CUSTOMER" ，已经批发出去给分销商

22-05-2009
我到MidValley Gardens MAXIS CENTRE找他，(他已调职到那里)，
因为25/5这个号码将会变成inactive,我要预先申请拿回这号码，他说没问题可以这样做
但是这次那顾问無誠意地帮我发送电子邮件,内容是要求重新启用此号码到POSTPAID Value８０ / Value１５０
他还说"制卡部"的其中一人是他的朋友,他们会跟进FOLLOW UP然后说要我等他的消息。。。
等了十天他没有回复我,

03-06-2009
我拨打他的手机号码和sms问他
他没有答复我&故意地没有回复我电话和sms，导致请求延迟
如果申请不成功，他应该告诉我
我又没有得罪他，为何他要这样欺骗我？
如果他不肯帮忙应该那时拒绝我，
他没有帮我,连E-MAIL都没有SEND过

16-06-2009
我又到klcc maxis centre找consultant MR.CHEAH帮忙决解这个问题
但不幸的是为时已晚,与上回相同的, 已经做成SIM CARD "  PREPAID CUSTOMER" ，(11/06/2009), 已经批发出去给分销商

军事天地

08-10-2008
my hotlink sim card number forgot top up, turned into inactive,

25-11-2008
I had been to KLCC MAXIS CENTER to look for a Chinese consultant help, his name was MR.LEE KIEN WOON, he helped me to write E-MAIL to go to " recycle sim card deparment " inquiry to apply to restore the sim card number,
but they gave him the response has made SIM CARD “PREPAID CUSTOMER”, has wholesaled to give the distributer  

22-05-2009
i came to MidValley Gardens MAXIS CENTRE looking for him, (he had been transferred there),
Because the 25 / 5, this number will become inactive, I would like to pre-apply for request this number back, he said that no problem can do so
But this time the consultant are insincerely help me send e-mail for request ,the content is reactivate the number to POSTPAID Value８０ / Value１５０
He also said that "the Department of recycle sim card" one of them is his friend,they will FOLLOW UP ,then said that wants me to wait for his news. . .
Waited for ten days he not to reply me yet

03-06-2009
I dial his handset phone number and sms ask him,
he no answer me & intentionally no answering my calling,causing request for delay
If the application is unsuccessful , he should tell me
I have not offended him, why he wanted to deceive me so?
he is not willing to help should reject me at that time,
He has not helped me, does not have SEND including E-MAIL

16-06-2009
I went to klcc maxis centre to find a consultant MR.CHEAH for help to solves this problem ,
But unfortunately was too late with previous same, already made SIM CARD “PREPAID CUSTOMER”(11/06/2009), has wholesaled to give the distributer

风满楼

08-10-2008
My Hotlink Sim Card became inactive because I had forgotten to top it up.

25-11-2008
I went to KLCC Maxis Centre to seek help from a Chinese consultant. His name is Mr. Lee Kien Woon. He helped me to send an e-mail to the "Recycle Sim Card Department" to have my Sim Card reactivated but he got a reply saying that the particular Sim Card had been converted into a "Prepaid Customer" Sim Card and distributed to a wholesaler.

[ 本帖最后由 风满楼 于 28-8-2009 01:54 PM 编辑 ]

ByronL

雖然我不會翻譯，但是我只能說一句，翻譯是不可以照著翻譯的。
照著翻譯給人的感覺就好像用翻譯工具翻譯一樣，甚至更差。

风满楼

原帖由 军事天地 于 26-8-2009 02:17 AM 发表
22-05-2009
我到MidValley Gardens MAXIS CENTRE找他，(他已调职到那里)，
因为25/5这个号码将会变成inactive,我要预先申请拿回这号码，他说没问题可以这样做
但是这次那顾问無誠意地帮我发送电子邮件,内容是要求重新启用此号码到POSTPAID Value８０ / Value１５０
他还说"制卡部"的其中一人是他的朋友,他们会跟进FOLLOW UP然后说要我等他的消息。。。
等了十天他没有回复我,  

22-05-2009

I went to Midvalley Garden Maxis Centre to see him. (He had been transferred to that branch)

Since my Sim Card would become inactive by May 25, I had to reapply for the Sim Card in order to keep the same number. He told me that it could be done without any problems.

But this time he just helped me to send an e-mail asking for my Sim card to be reactivated and converted into a Postpaid Value 80 or Value 150 card. He also added that he had a friend at the department in charge of issuing Sim Cards and they would follow up on my application, and asked me to wait for further notification.

I waited for ten days but heard nothing from him.

[ 本帖最后由 风满楼 于 28-8-2009 01:56 PM 编辑 ]

风满楼

原帖由 军事天地 于 26-8-2009 02:17 AM 发表
03-06-2009
我拨打他的手机号码和sms问他
他没有答复我&故意地没有回复我电话和sms，导致请求延迟
如果申请不成功，他应该告诉我
我又没有得罪他，为何他要这样欺骗我？
如果他不肯帮忙应该那时拒绝我，
他没有帮我,连E-MAIL都没有SEND过
16-06-2009
我又到klcc maxis centre找consultant MR.CHEAH帮忙决解这个问题
但不幸的是为时已晚,与上回相同的, 已经做成SIM CARD "  PREPAID CUSTOMER" ，(11/06/2009), 已经批发出去给分销商 ...

03-06-2009
I tried to contact him through his cellphone and SMS but he deliberately avoided my calls and SMS. This had resulted in a delay in my application for my Sim card to be reactivated.
He could have told me if my application had been rejected.
I didn't offend him in any way, shape, or form. Why did he do this to me?
If he hadn't been willing to help me, he could have refused and told me so.
It happened that he didn't help me, and he didn't even send a single e-mail.

16-06-2009
I went to KLCC Maxis Centre to see the consultant, Mr. Cheah, again to ask for his help with this matter.
Unfortunately,it was too late. The same thing happened again; The particular Sim Card had already been converted into a "Prepaid Customer" Sim Card(11/06/2009) and distributed to a wholesaler.


OK...交差了！

[ 本帖最后由 风满楼 于 28-8-2009 01:57 PM 编辑 ]

军事天地

老兄,谢了

欠你一个网站人情

以后有事要帮忙PM我

风满楼

原帖由 军事天地 于 28-8-2009 04:02 PM 发表
老兄,谢了

欠你一个网站人情

以后有事要帮忙PM我

助人为快乐之本！

skyong73

原帖由 风满楼 于 28-8-2009 01:38 PM 发表



03-06-2009
I tried to contact him through his cellphone and SMS but he deliberately avoided my calls and SMS. This had resulted in a delay in my application for my Sim card to be reactivated.
...

I am a english learner.
I am very envy your perfect english.
Hopefully, you would help me when I need.

风满楼

原帖由 skyong73 于 25-9-2009 03:06 PM 发表

I am a english learner.
那要加油咯.....
I am very envy your perfect english.
说不上完美.....无需妒忌....
Hopefully, you would help me when I need.
当然，能帮的我一定帮.....

军事天地

再来帮忙翻译一小段，谢谢你


第一段

03-10-2009
我又到KLCC Maxis Centre见Mr. Cheah，把投诉信交给他，他说星期一(05-10-2009 ) 会提交投诉信给经理； 到目前为止，我还没有收到任何答复？

27-10-2009
我send e-mail到<CUSTOMERCARE@maxis.com.my> 去投诉By Gmail
I send e-mail to <CUSTOMERCARE@maxis.com.my>  to complain by Gmail

28-10-2009 15:20,
他们的Customer Relations Unit   /  Customer Operations回复我 “Please accept our sincere apologies for any inconvenience caused.”
但我不接受，因为没有拿回那个号码，Lee Kien Woon没有赔偿taxi 费



第二段

公布这件事情，让大家知道一位不负责任的consultant，他的行为与服务态度(attitude)

我每次来KL处理这件事都要请假和坐长途TAXI，但最后我被这位consultant骗了，精神与金钱上都蒙受损失

请大家来评理!

朕乃皇上

第一段

03-10-2009
我又到KLCC Maxis Centre见Mr. Cheah，把投诉信交给他，他说星期一(05-10-2009 ) 会提交投诉信给经理； 到目前为止，我还没有收到任何答复？

I returned to KLCC Maxis Centre to see the foresaid consultant, Mr Cheah and passed him my letter of complaint, of which he promised to submit to the branch manager on Monday the 5th Oct 2009. However, to date, i have not received a single reply from your end.

朕乃皇上

Following this, on the 27th October 2009, I composed an e-mail to raise the issue to your customer care department. My email is XXXXX , for your perusal. The department forwarded their apologies in their reply, of which I cannot accept, due to the fact that I have permanently lost my number because of your staff's ineffectiveness and incompetence. Further more, Mr Lee Kien Woon did not compensate me the taxi fares.

朕乃皇上

见笑了。。。。。

风满楼

呵呵，谢皇上恩典，帮我解难......最近比较忙......
我建议军事天地不要指定谁来翻译，那样会有更多人为您效劳....哈哈

对不起，职业病又发作了

[foresaid] 应该是 aforesaid 或 aforementioned 吧？

[passed] 应该是 pass 吧？
I returned to... to see... and pass him...

[...letter of complaint, of which he promised to submit...]
[their reply, of which I cannot accept]
of 好像是多余的，接不到......

[...did not compensate me the taxi fares]
通常是 compensate someone for something 这么用
所以 ... compensate me for ...
例句：The firm will compensate workers for their loss of earnings.

对不起，在太岁头上动土....请皇上开恩！

朕乃皇上

改的好。。除了of which 那个。其他我都认同
另外 foresaid 应该也是可以用，因为我用了这么久都没出事

[ 本帖最后由 朕乃皇上 于 19-11-2009 12:47 PM 编辑 ]

风满楼

原帖由 朕乃皇上 于 19-11-2009 12:40 PM 发表
改的好。。除了of which 那个。其他我都认同

of which .... 正式文件都是这么写的吗？
我很少接触那一类的文件。

朕乃皇上

erm。。。不知道leh 我就觉得没有错
是feel 来的。。

军事天地

帮忙改正英文文法！

第一段

03-10-2009
我又到KLCC Maxis Centre见Mr. Cheah，把投诉信交给他，他说星期一(05-10-2009 ) 会提交投诉信给经理； 到目前为止，我还没有收到任何答复？

27-10-2009
我send e-mail到<CUSTOMERCARE@maxis.com.my> 去投诉By Gmail

28-10-2009 15:20,
他们的Customer Relations Unit   /  Customer Operations回复我 “Please accept our sincere apologies for any inconvenience caused.”
但我不接受，因为没有拿回那个号码，Lee Kien Woon没有赔偿taxi 费

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3-10-2009
i went to meet mr.cheah again at the klcc maxis centre , to give the complaint letter to him, he said on Monday (05-10-2009) will submit a complaint letter to the manager; So far, I have not received any response?

27-10-2009
I send e-mail to <CUSTOMERCARE@maxis.com.my>  to complain  use by Gmail

28-10-2009 15:20,
Their Customer Relations Unit / Customer Operations reply me "Please accept our sincere apologies for any inconvenience caused."
But I do not accept that because the number does not get it back,  Lee Kien Woon no compensate taxi fee

[ 本帖最后由 军事天地 于 19-11-2009 02:24 PM 编辑 ]

军事天地

帮忙改正英文文法！

第二段

公布这件事情，让大家知道一位不负责任的consultant，他的行为与服务态度(attitude)

我每次来KL处理这件事都要请假和坐长途TAXI，但最后我被这位consultant骗了，精神与金钱上都蒙受损失

请大家来评理!

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Announcement about this matter, let everyone know that an irresponsible  consultant, his behavior and attitude

Every time I come to KL to deal with this matter must leave and take long-distance TAXI, But in the end I was had been cheated by the consultant ，Spirit and money heavy losses on both  to me

Please come to an evaluation。